I know you are all on egg shells waiting...
T-Dog, ghostoffuffle, coffeesp00ns, rezzeJ, BLOB_CASTLE, galen, bgood79, jonaswildman, randomuser and others that participated in the past and want to moving forward.
I made this tonight. It's not awesome, but it's not shit either. With your help, it could be better.....
Add to it! Who is up first?
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Vacant home
There's nothing left
Beneath that dress
The sinners and the soldiers
Look the same to me these days Look in my face
Look in my eyes
The first to look away
Holds something I don't need to Know you to love you anymore
To know you is to know I don't know
Anything about love Look in those homes
That line our roads
The strangers waiving coded signals
I don't care to read Just hold your breath
And raise your feet
We pass the cemetary
Full of corpses I don't Know you or love you anymore
Cause to know you is to know I don't know
Anything about this life It's hard to separate who I want to be
From the man that shows up half in the bag
When cutting corners I just count to three
And never see the bruises that I leave
Behind To know you is to love you best
There's nothing left beneath that dress this is a vacant homeThis one really captured me tng. I like to hear these things as a story that the narrator is telling me about a life. Sometimes that narrator is struggling to find the words or tunes to tell his story, so he unwraps the song one line at a time and this narrator is discovering that he doesn't know anything about love and doesn't know anything about life... the cemetary is looming up. And the story -- the story is how this narrator is realizing that the house is empty and there's not even anyone in the dress... maybe he just got dumped... and is seeing the bruises for the first time... or maybe not... I'd like you to compose the sound track for my one-person show. i.e. 7-10 minute bits, interspersed with songs like this one ...
I love your interpretation of the song, thanks lil. I'm glad this one spoke to you. I'd pay money to see that one-person show.
I'm game. Insom is out of town this week so I have some extra free time around my recording setup :). Send it this way, from the way it sounds I may go a little deathcab or postal service with it if that's cool.
Will do. I'm not at my studio till later tonight tho. Edit: randomuser -I have been on a big Postal Service kick of late, so that would be SWEET. I really enjoyed what you did with the last piece. Nothing is precious here, it's yours to destroy or do with as you please. Have fun!
Ok so, it didn't end up 100% postal servicey. I went a little weird with it and I don't know if everything 100% works but I think I'm mostly done :). Changed up the arrangement a bit and the tempo. I keep listening to it and I think my ears are tired so if the mixed is unbalanced I apologize. https://www.dropbox.com/s/6zbck1jw180lnpz/OOTPHubski.wav?dl=0 It's also very different....
It's fantastic. My wife listened and said, "it's beautiful." and then followed with "it could be a hit." The "beautiful" thing she has said about maybe..... 3-4 of the hundreds of songs I have written. The "hit" thing, zero till now. I really like the interpretation. You took what was a bridge/interlude and made it the verse. It works. I love the build of it, the dynamics etc. I love the instrumentation you added and the melodies. You are a talented guy randomuser and I'm glad you are participating in these. I'm officially a fan of your work. My only criticism would be the ending. It needs a more abrupt ending and not the introduction of the guitar etc. Your version is such a nice composition and it's pretty tight and then goes all loose at the end. I think it should end at "bruises that I leave." As sung sans music but with the lyric "behind" echoing after. -just my two cents. Dude, you should link to some of your music, I'd like to hear what you do. Again, great work! I loved it.
I'm glad you and your wife liked it. The ending is just something I kind of do a lot of the time with tracks I'm working on and have really wonky intros and outros lol. Sort of a Trent Reznoresque trait of my composition. I haven't really posted any personal stuff like my soundcloud because I've been trying to keep low key/not make a fool out of myself over here as it's insoms place to hang out so just trying to be respectful of the girlfriend and her space haha. But here's my www.soundcloud.com/lovelovemusic
Dude, I really want to hear this right now. Any chance you can just email me the MP3. I'm driving and will be for the next few hours and can't get it to stream via dropbox. Soundcloud would work too. TIA.
I've been on too many lately. I'll stave off the temptation to throw down a track (although, it does sound really nice as is already). If no one does hop on it soon and you want bass, let me know!
jonaswildman mentioned to me that he may be able to throw on some drums and guitar this week. Let's hold off until he does. Glad you like it though, thanks!