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thenewgreen  ·  3648 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: A letter to the girl who accused me of rape when I was 15

This "story" deserves a far better effort, but in the short time I had, I could only muster this:

  I was a boy and I left a monster
  You could see the shift as they left my porch
  Just a child and they ripped me open
  She still smiled at me from the third row

  All my friends
  They stood by me

  I was just a boy back then
  (my monster)
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edit: ghostoffuffle, T-Dog, jonaswildman, coffeesp00ns, BLOB_CASTLE, theholywombat, rezzeJ -feel free to add to it if you'd like.





BLOB_CASTLE  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I left it pretty basic intentionally. Let me know if there's anything your ear hears over this.

thenewgreen  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

This sounds great! It's perfect, I couldn't imagine anything different. Great work BC! I'm excited to hear more added to it. ghostoffuffle, jonaswildman, rezzeJ, T-Dog, have a listen to this one with B_C's bowed bass. Anyone want to add to it?

T-Dog  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

how's this? Nothing too fancy, i just thought it needed a little more low end in the second half.

BLOB_CASTLE  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I'm glad you thought so too. I thought about adding another layer toward the end, but had decided against it.

thenewgreen  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I dig it, a lot! This is going in a very cool direction imo. I think the song needs the addition of drums when your bass part comes in the first time. Then a big building drum part that can cut in to a beat mid way through the end part, when your bass starts doing more rhythmic stuff and less "buildy" stuff.

If any drummers are willing to tackle this piece (I obviously didn't use a click), then please... go for it. rezzeJ and jonaswildman -any interest? If not, I'll take a stab at it, but I'd prefer a better drummer.

Great work T-Dog, it compliments B_C's bowed bass well.

shout-out to ghostoffuffle

coffeesp00ns  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

dig it!

BLOB_CASTLE  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I'm hearing some sultry bowed upright on this one

edit: Maybe sultry wasn't the most appropriate word...

thenewgreen  ·  3647 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Sounds good! Go for it pal!!