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OftenBen  ·  3811 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: The fog of love

Better?

And I kind of like appearance because of the tempo it gives.





lil  ·  3811 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Yes much better.

    might be severely navel gazing
Poetry is a good place to do it. Questions of identity are important (in my world anyway). Who am I? How do I come across to others? Can I change what I see in the mirror? Do I have a core sense of self that I carry with me? Am I lovable?

I think that's some of what the poem is asking. Yes? No?

OftenBen  ·  3808 days ago  ·  link  ·  

    I think that's some of what the poem is asking. Yes? No?

That's definitely a way to read it, and the thought definitely crossed my mind a few times when I was rereading sections while finishing it.

In writing it I was thinking more about how when we get to know people intimately, there is a certain reflection of oneself visible in them. You can look at them, at their actions, into their eyes and empathize so completely that you become them, in a way.