Yeah, the swell did add to the song, for sure. This was more what I was trying to talk about. The first version sounds cool, but I guess what I was trying to say is that I thought that the song could use more contrast (is that the right word?). Anyway, this sounds really good, so props dudes! What do you think you'll do with the vocals?KB adds in an intro and also a really beautiful swell at 1:30 that adds some well needed dimension to the build/arc of the song. -humanodon, I think this will satiate your desire for "more changes in dynamic."
KB also brings out the low end in a big way at the end, really beefing up the closure of the song while sneaking the rhythm guitar track back in for a small bit of fragility right at the close.
I think contrast is definitely the right word. As for vocals, I'd like to rerecord them and remain in the higher register. I'd probably double that higher vocal and then add a lower octave vocal to accompany it. But the vocal track that I have right now is pretty bad. There are several different takes (from what I remember) and none are good. They're over-thought and none are in the moment. You tend to know when you get a good track and on this song I haven't yet.