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Isherwood  ·  2729 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: The word picture

It's an interesting idea, but I can't help but feel like I ultimately read nothing. I liked the duality of scene, but the idea of the place also being frozen in time felt overshadowed by how much the place moves. I could see this as a colorful picture, but currently each side negates the other and leaves me wanting something more tangible.

arguewithatree  ·  2729 days ago  ·  link  ·  

It's supposed to be a snapshot from my time at summer camp growing up. Being a teenager and being away from home and growing and learning but feeling like you're running on a hamster wheel and not really going anywhere.

I used to write all the time and I want to get back into it.

Isherwood  ·  2729 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I might have been a little overly harsh with this round of feedback. I tried to crank something out on a busy day instead of making you wait for when I had more time. That's my mistake.

I also went to summer camp, even worked there for a few years. It was a magical time. Do you think you could write me a scene where you describe it using each sense at least once? If I don't hear back from you by monday, that'll likely be the prompt of the day.

arguewithatree  ·  2729 days ago  ·  link  ·  

No it's fine; it wasn't inaccurate feedback. You were supposed to get a sense of nothing because that's how time moves in the summer when you're young. It was weird coming back and working as a counselor. Everyone seems so little and naive and you just want to protect them from everything (it also made me realize what a problem child i was)

I'll wait for Monday. I usually try to take a hubsk break over the weekend