I might have been a little overly harsh with this round of feedback. I tried to crank something out on a busy day instead of making you wait for when I had more time. That's my mistake.
I also went to summer camp, even worked there for a few years. It was a magical time. Do you think you could write me a scene where you describe it using each sense at least once? If I don't hear back from you by monday, that'll likely be the prompt of the day.