There's good energy to the track, the lyrics aren't bad, and the singing has potential. Your voice has a sense of conviction that would really benefit from some more power behind it. Though I know it's hard when you're still developing and gaining confidence, if you take a big breath and sing louder it will open up the airway. This allows you to hit notes easier, put less strain on the voice/throat, and generally relax. Sometimes it sounds like you're a bit tense trying to sing along, and I think doing this could help that. Keep it up! I've been lacking some confidence recording/posting some singer-songwriter type stuff but you've inspired me to reconsider. :)
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. There's a couple things to that vocal tenseness. The first is that I'm not trained and I'm still just...uncomfortable hearing myself sing, but working on singing more often and being more open about it. The second is that I know who these songs are about, and they're about real people and things that I still talk to and that makes me very nervous that everyone will figure the game out. But yes, I agree with what you're saying. I'd love to see some singer/songwriter stuff from you sometime!
https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/2680326/Sights.mp3 This is something I managed to record over the last couple of days. Just a singular verse at the moment as I still need to get the other sections finalised.