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comment by Isherwood
Isherwood  ·  3451 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Writing Prompt: No dialogue

I actually really like this. You might be able to tell from my other feedback that I like to be able to "see" the scene and I felt like I could in this one. Maybe expand the setting out a bit, building the ground with the sky, but that's pretty minor. There's good feelings and a pleasant conclusion. I like it.