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user-inactivated  ·  3497 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: A short poem about a journey

-liked the switch to present tense in first stanza

-I don't like lurching beast as much because lurching is something buses actually do, if that makes sense

-like waiting in memory much more

-And the last stanza is a big improvement.

Cheers!