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Complexity  ·  4325 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Holiday Haiku Challenge:

Bone white snow forest

Still, quiet, stained pink with dawn;

One plump, red robin.





thenewgreen  ·  4325 days ago  ·  link  ·  

This one is beautiful. I've always liked the juxtaposition of red on white as in the Fleet Foxes White Winter Hymnal. -great work.

But upon further reading, doesn't the second line have 8 syllables? Still, nice work.

Complexity  ·  4325 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Thanks!

Maybe US English is quie-et. My clipped British accent pronounces it as one syllable.

(on reflection, edited to replace 'and' with a semicolon as a kiru)

thenewgreen  ·  4325 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Thanks, I didn't realize that. Quiet was definitely the culprit.