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user-inactivated  ·  3081 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: The L.E.D. Quandary: Why There’s No Such Thing as “Built to Last"

No. The issue is that the sentence is unnecessarily complex, creating a need for the extra punctuation. By rearranging the sentence structure and breaking it into two sentences, it cuts down on the punctuation and also makes it easier to read.





user-inactivated  ·  3081 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Would you agree that the original sentence would sound well spoken out? Reading it, perhaps, would be more difficult than it should be, but listening to it might give a different vibe - and it sounds to me that this vibe is fine.