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kleinbl00  ·  4782 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: A song I wrote and recorded with "The New Green" after I saw breast implants..
My votes?

- Organ hook is infectious. I'm fond. I'd take it out of the realm of Farfisa and go for more of an overdriven B3 sound. I'd also flaunt it. It's a little hesitant.

- Guitar solo should be an octave lower. Yeah, you can hit the high registers but it needs presence below.

- that big empty hole prior to the solo needs a "manic street preacher"-type spoken-word piece hawking the beauty equivalent of Ginsu knives, etc, ideally through a megaphone-style slapback.

- Push drums. U2's "Sunday Bloody Sunday" as an example - forcing time at the midbeat so that the drums have that urgent "trying to catch up" sort of feel while also being precisely on time.

- No comments on mix because I'm on a laptop.

The lyrics speak to the lunacy of "obeying Madison Avenue" to coin a phrase. There should be a little "stop the world I want to get off" to the production. It's definitely a song worthy of revisiting with a little more deliberation. Nice job!