I'd have to agree with cgod. It's too thick to read comfortably. It feels to me that you try to prove a lot of different things all at once. As well, there's some word choices that hinder your overall readability. Take the first sentence: You've got a fair few things going on in here. "I'm about to give a qualifier that will explain my thinking." "This is something that I've thought of a while ago." "My past religious experiences have drawn me to the conclusion that 'the truth of spiritual existence' cannot be perceived." This is a lot of different things to pack into a sentence, and this really "densely-packed" structure goes on for the rest of this essay. While reading it, I find myself needing to go back and re-read because I've forgotten how it started. That problem is multiplied by the lack of line breaks/other formatting. Now moving on to the next sentence: This sentence is easier to understand (shorter length), but is still organized in a confusing way. The first part "Such an agnostic belief as this which I do presently hold" could be easily replaced with "This belief". With some other changes: There's some other stuff here, but cgod summed it up better than I've done so far. Thanks for posting it, it was an interesting read.It is important, I believe, when discussing this topic of atheism and its impact on our world, to first state that, hitherto my analysis of the subject, I have undergone a religious journey of sorts by which I have been led to the undeniable conclusion that the truth of existence which is beyond known existence is unknown or unknowable.
It is important, I believe, when discussing this topic of atheism and its impact on our world, to first state that,
hitherto my analysis of the subject,
I have undergone a religious journey of sorts by which I have been led to the undeniable conclusion that the truth of existence which is beyond known existence is unknown or unknowable.
Such an agnostic belief as this which I do presently hold is not justified or properly defined by just the term "agnostic."
This belief is not properly defined by the term "agnostic."