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OftenBen  ·  3811 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: The fog of love

Haven't written for a few months... liberal application of WD40 Also might be severely navel gazing with this one. Honest critique appreciated :3

  Cleaned often or not, I still can't see
  What's near, and right in front of me.

  A brush of cloth, or clear insight
  Brings sharp focus, mirror bright.

  Briefly seen and briefer known,
  Ego, Id, and not alone.

  There deep within the fogging vision,
  All mans love, and our derision.

  Love again, and fear and pain,
  and tenderness, and love again.

  I think I know these loathsome depths,
  These soaring highs at which I wept,

  We're not so different, mirror and I,
  More similar than would appearance belie,

  But even with this realization,
  fog coats the mirror with perspiration,

  Until a cloth again I brush,
  this truth shall know a gentle hush.

  Like mist across a mirror pane,
  I'll slowly forget I'm you again.

(Note This doesn't really feel done* to me, but I feel like I've painted myself into a corner.)