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lil · 4297 days ago · link · · parent · post: Today's Writing Prompt: Encounters with an Ex or Naked Pictures

I love the ending - of course we bring a lot of our own experience to a poem.

I kept seeing this candle.

but of course you are talking about candles each illuminated, never crossed. Why would I imagine a braided candle on one wick? Maybe that's what I wish it would be.

First a question: when you use the word "tongue" in the almost last stanza - had you used that word in an earlier stanza in an earlier draft? Just wondering. More on this in a bit.

also, line six... "the way" ... "the way"...

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humanodon · 4297 days ago · link ·

Oh, I've never seen a candle like that. I'm not much of a candle guy, but I wonder if there's a name for those other than "woven wick candle" or whatever.

Thanks for pointing out the double "the way." I've changed it to "her when".