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Outlander  ·  4071 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: Go Outside

A new can fresh and cutting

only a slight buzz,

I'm told to stop but I won't.

A rythmic grinding

over the album on repeat

i should fix it but I won't,

it's too quiet behind distractions to bother.

The wind chills the stale air

and amplifies the stale thoughts,

call and ask, or don't

because I won't.

--Sorry I don't write often and it's not a haiku but it's all I've got right now.





humanodon  ·  4071 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Don't apologize for trying something out when someone gives you an opportunity to do so!

lil  ·  4071 days ago  ·  link  ·  

no need to apologize. I like your poem.

    It's too quiet behind distractions to bother.
The quiet behind distractions is chilling (like the wind in the next line). I sometimes think we fill our lives with distractions to drown out the quiet behind.
Outlander  ·  4071 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Thank you. I was going for a feeling of distraction with the whole thing. Even the "grinding" was just a minor problem that I am trying to blow up to help drown the bigger and more pressing issues. Quiet isn't something I want right now. Great prompt that really got me thinking! (And thanks for pointing out the typo, it's now fixed)

lil  ·  4071 days ago  ·  link  ·  

    Quiet isn't something I want right now
I get that. You want to drown out the
    stale thoughts
I hope we'll see more of your poetry in these places.