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Becoming_Betty  ·  4129 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: The New Day

Transformation and Timing

My eyes strain

in constant pain

the light too bright to bare,

I step out to find fresh air.

It is always sweeter at this hour,

I fill my nostrils with the chill of autumn,

the scents of decay and dew,

my eyes rest in the comfort of a sky its deepest blue.

The exchange we rarely witness

of night to day, occurs with swift quickness.

As my eyes reopen

to my moment being stolen...

The switch had been made, the barrier crossed,

the sun sprinkled pink to the clouds, purple to the sky,

quickly tonight has become last night...

my last night.

My eyes close

and there I go,

slumping like a slinky down the front stairs,

with peace I release, my last breathe of the freshest air.





lil  ·  4129 days ago  ·  link  ·  

It sounds like you are killing off this narrator. Is there a back story?

Becoming_Betty  ·  4129 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Well, admittedly no. I wrote it sitting on my porch, locked out accidentally of my own house. It was inspired by the main character from "The History Of Love", as that's what I've been reading. An older male who is nervous to die without being seen that day. So, inevitably I've been thinking of ways this man may pass.

lil  ·  4129 days ago  ·  link  ·  

That's the back story. Thanks!

The "slumping like a slinky" line is head over heels! Great image.

Becoming_Betty  ·  4129 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Yeah, after I posted that, I realized I actually gave a back story... :) And thank you Lil!