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comment by Rossignol

It's like Shlohmo and Nosaj Thing got together to make a Venetian lullaby. This is really good.

I don't really know what you want opinions on but as a layman, I felt that the guitar and piano (?) could've been made looser on Stray Motion. Twangier, more reverb, or perhaps replaced with a different stringed instrument altogether (something oriental? I heard an instrument like that used to good effect recently, I'll get back to you if I can find the song). Moonlight Mentality was the weakest song. It seemed like you were auditioning the bass: bringing it in and then taking it back out before it had finished what it had wanted to do. I wanted it to come to a point where it did what it needed to and proceeded to synthesise with the track more, like Vegyn's Fresco Dome at around 2:10.

The last two tracks had a very different dynamic. They felt more metropolitan and paranoid and I preferred them for that. That is really nothing other than taste. In my opinion, Soon After was SO good. It responded to my criticism on the first two tracks and combined them in one, throwing in some really engaging drums and hermaphroditic vocals for good measure, absolutely loved it. Huge props.





rezzeJ  ·  3543 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Thanks so much for detailed feedback. It's not often enough that I get well, written critiques on my music.

I agree that in general the instrumental parts were quite rigid. The track having an odd rhythm, and the it's particular interaction with the melody, made it not perhaps as naturally sounding as it could have. The piano you mentioned is a Rhodes emulation.

Moonlight Mentality is the oldest track so potentially inherently the weakest. I agree the track could've gone a different direction. I tend to focus a lot on the rhythms and sometimes neglect musical elements because of it. The second drop would've been heightened by the introduction of a more interactive and molded bass.

I think that's why you found 'Soon After' the strongest. In retrospect, I guess I kind of 'spared no expense' on what I could variate and play around with. I think the guitar could've been better, and more variation in the second section would have kept it engaging. I was really pleased with the progression on that one thought. The simultaneous key, tempo and time signature change was one of the hardest things I've done. I'm glad you found it worth it. On a side note, it's also the newest tracks there.

I look forward to displaying my current works in process once complete. I've been trying to hard to keep them going in the vain of more focus on upping the musicality and instrumental flourishes.