It's fantastic. My wife listened and said, "it's beautiful." and then followed with "it could be a hit." The "beautiful" thing she has said about maybe..... 3-4 of the hundreds of songs I have written. The "hit" thing, zero till now. I really like the interpretation. You took what was a bridge/interlude and made it the verse. It works. I love the build of it, the dynamics etc. I love the instrumentation you added and the melodies. You are a talented guy randomuser and I'm glad you are participating in these. I'm officially a fan of your work. My only criticism would be the ending. It needs a more abrupt ending and not the introduction of the guitar etc. Your version is such a nice composition and it's pretty tight and then goes all loose at the end. I think it should end at "bruises that I leave." As sung sans music but with the lyric "behind" echoing after. -just my two cents. Dude, you should link to some of your music, I'd like to hear what you do. Again, great work! I loved it.