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rezzeJ  ·  4272 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Mind State

Wow, great response! I totally agree that the poem has strong stanzas followed by weak and I do think that last part of it just isn't really that great.

I'm glad some of my imagery struck a chord with you and appreciate pointing out where it falters. I'll definitely keep it mind in future poems. As I said, this is an old (and the first) poem I wrote. Check out some of the others I've posted here, I would love to know what you think.

I really appreciate the comments, welcome to Hubski!