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lil  ·  4075 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: Go Outside

I'm so glad you got out and wrote this.

I don't know how you feel though.

Is there some way you can get your eyes checked? It might have to be a priority.

re the poem: it works for me, with the sudden memory of the concession stands. and we've all struggled with impossible plastic wrappings.

I would add one thing. What do you think?

   Urge to go to the top floor of a really tall building
   and throw something
(otherwise it might sound like you want to jump off... "and throw something" might be yourself, but ... oh I don't know.)

Edit: Hi again, louderwords

In a discussion of your poem, a reader said to me:

   Urge to go to the top floor of a really tall building
   And throw up my arms to the sky.