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_refugee_  ·  4163 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: I Got Mad So I Wrote A Poem

I would go further and edit (this is just me playing. when i go and edit something it's about me putting it in my personal style, I'm not saying I think it would necessarily be better this way - just wanted to see how I'd warp this to my own voice) to this:

    A relationship locks
    eyes across a crowded room. 
    Some beautiful someone,
    the rest of your lives
    imagined for the rest
    of the day. 
It is NOT the same as what you posted though.