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comment by humanodon
humanodon  ·  3896 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Ask Hubski: Hubski profiles... How could they be better?

Two spaces before a line breaks formatting:

  I am on a train.  In my car
  There is a young family
  With a litter of children.
  I am not calling the mother
  A bitch, though she snaps 
  At her whining young.
  Poor dad.  Patience is not
  A currency: his coffee cup empty
  As he panhandles for peace.




lil  ·  3896 days ago  ·  link  ·  

That's the perspective of the narrator having to share his train car.

Here it is from a different perspective:

  We are on a train.  The kids
  and some guy over there
  scribbling in his notebook
  and the baby daddy - 
  I am not calling him
  A good-fer-nothing layabout
  though he rolls his eyes at me
  as I try to get the kids seated.
  Poor me.  Wisdom is not
  My currency:  I am running out 
  Of patience.
  And longing for peace.
humanodon  ·  3896 days ago  ·  link  ·  

You can do stanza breaks:

  Like

  This
lil  ·  3896 days ago  ·  link  ·  

  yes, true

  but it seems like we should be able to get stanza breaks

  without having to 

  indent every line two spaces -- I'll have to get management on to this.