First demo was recorded right after I wrote it. The second one was recorded tonight. I wanted to try a more up-tempo version and I just bought a Little Big-Muff and wanted to run a bass guitar through it, so I did. Neither version is even close to complete, but I like the song and wanted to try out some ideas. Any feedback is welcome.
jonaswildman, You'll be glad to know I was making some music tonight.
I dunno man, the first version sounds pretty damn close to complete as it is- the minimal arrangement fits the lyrics and the melody like a glove- good key, a little bit downtempo, plenty of space for the listener to appreciate the tone of that acoustic, and the way it interacts with the single voice. It all coalesces into a really nice, bittersweet tune. If anything, I'd lobby for paring it down further- just that guitar and the one vox. The point at which the group stuff comes in, that'd be just as weighty with a little more belting from the lead vox. Like, singing hard enough to get a little gritty. Bottom line: there's just no need to garnish such a strong melody. In terms of V2- goddamn, I love the space you've gotten out of that instrumental arrangement. Those effects are used really nicely. But it lends a certain sense of incongruity to the subject matter. Given the key change, increase in tempo, additional voices- might as well just leverage all that into another song. My two cents, anyhow. Hell of a song, I think it just kind of speaks for itself.
Thanks for listening fuffle. I agree that the first version is the way to go. I think it needs some work though. I'll work on it in the near future and post again, if you don't mind I would love your future feedback. How is your song coming along? I am looking forward to hearing the finished product.
Always happy to give feedback if desired. Looking forward to hearing what you do with it! That song's on the backburner until my bassist and guitarists can add the finishing touches. I did, however, dial back the effect on the vox- it's a little bit more decipherable now. Afraid to listen to it too much more, I don't want it to start sounding stale, since then I won't be able to make any good decisions about it. In the meantime, starting to work on recording the next song. I'll shoot it your way for perusal when I'm done!
In the meantime, starting to work on recording the next song. I'll shoot it your way for perusal when I'm done!
awesome! I very much look forward to that.