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This is a pretty passage. It has actual atmosphere, the words don't just build up the space but fill it in and give it depth. The intertwining of feeling and setting is like a well woven rope, layering each aspect in equal measure to make a stronger scene. My areas for improvement are small, like using "you're" then "I" in the last sentence of the first paragraph, but even then I can't commit to such petty feedback. I want to know more about this world, this person, and this fire, and I would suggest thinking about setting future scenes in this world.