Things:
1. This is a demo, going to redo this with a click track and changing some parts of the lead guitar. Lyrics and all that will probably stay the same. The final version will have drums.
2. I'm finally settling into a singing voice and songwriting style, and apparently that means I'm writing music that sounds like AJJ and/or The Mountain Goats for the time being. At least that's what everyone else has said about this.
3. First multi-track recording I've ever done of a song I've written.
4. Feedback is welcome!
5. Pinging thenewgreen.
There's good energy to the track, the lyrics aren't bad, and the singing has potential. Your voice has a sense of conviction that would really benefit from some more power behind it. Though I know it's hard when you're still developing and gaining confidence, if you take a big breath and sing louder it will open up the airway. This allows you to hit notes easier, put less strain on the voice/throat, and generally relax. Sometimes it sounds like you're a bit tense trying to sing along, and I think doing this could help that.
Keep it up! I've been lacking some confidence recording/posting some singer-songwriter type stuff but you've inspired me to reconsider. :)