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rezzeJ  ·  3421 days ago  ·  link  ·    ·  parent  ·  post: Today's Writing Prompt: What Can a Broken Heart Do?

Definitely a bit cliché, but I always want to contribute at least something whenever a writing prompt comes along. Especially so as I hadn't done any poetry for a while. I've been concentrating more on lyrics. First draft business too: He seldom sat this way.

  His jaw clenched tight
  A twist in his gut
  He looked away, fenced
  In by rushing thoughts

  He settled and met her gaze
  She blinks, pupils dilated
  So long had he awaited another glimpse
  He bites his lip with baited breath
  His broken heart rolled three blank dice

  The first rolls with a thirst of a soul enticed
  One that has to think twice
  Each side strung along
  by various lies

  The second beckoned questions
  As it slowed 
  The tension grew
  What could he ask out of the blue?

  The third remained clouded.
  Strained as he waited for an answer.
  And as nothing came 
  He knew he was free again.




bristolstreet  ·  3420 days ago  ·  link  ·  

I think it's cool that you went with the "fortune-telling" aspect of rolling dice. It makes me think of tarot cards--isn't there dice involved in a reading?

lil  ·  3421 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Your lines are inspiring me, rezzeJ and thenewgreen

tng - could be a song

rezzeJ - I love the idea of the three blank dice having desires, but blanked by lies, tension, and cloudiness...

I'll have something by midnight.

_refugee_ is not experiencing a broken heart right now...

humanodon might be... or might be between broken hearts

flagamuffin - who knows?

galen probably...

and all our hearts are broken by 8bit's temporary absence...

_refugee_  ·  3421 days ago  ·  link  ·  

galen  ·  3419 days ago  ·  link  ·  

Rather than "Freedom from love / Freedom from the heartache," I used to think the lyrics were "Freedom from the freedom from the heartache." I think I like it better that way.

galen  ·  3417 days ago  ·  link  ·  

  You've broken my heart into three little pieces:
  One for you
  One for me
  One for us.

  I know I can't blame you but
  Who else is there for it?
  It is you who has crushed me
  To dust

  And I want to request of you, immediately
  Please reprise
  your philosophies
  Of love

  'Cuz it seems to me lately
  You've a mutable temper
  And it's kinda hard
  For me to trust
lil  ·  3417 days ago  ·  link  ·  

  You've thrown me some crumbs
  That I follow discreetly
  hoping somewhere that
  I'll find a crust

  but I'm tired of waiting
  and tired of trying
  though I know that 
  you can't be rushed - - -
  it looks like it's
  love me or bust.