The sadness of finding out that is the most empty, helpless, and hollow of sadnesses. It's not a place one wants to visit, but writing poetry in that state of pain can deliver some haunting metaphors: you are no longer the beloved.
the broken heart rolls three blank dice
"Three blank dice"--I love that. You roll, you're hoping, and it's the only impossible result that is worse than the worst possible outcome. and are all such dissonant, harsh lines--and I think it's partly because they end on an unstressed syllable, stopping on the "downturn." are no longer the beloved.
I take a machete to a tulip.
Where death is something you can fuck up
the angel has a harelip
For sure. I was talking more about how it scanned/sounded when read aloud. But composition and meaning interact, as always.
I guess I would say I dabble. I have been published once a couple of years ago in a national YA lit mag, and I've taken a class in university, but I feel like I am much better at appreciating than creating most of the time. Are you a poet? :)
I sometimes write things for hubski under the tag #todayswritingprompt. The real poets on this site include _refugee_, humanodon, rezzeJ. thenewgreen has amazing song lyrics and even flagamuffin has impressed me over the months with a verse or two.
Working and quite guzzling
But the state of the economy to come Is dark scary and puzzling
When I'm drunk on kahlua and rum Come on lil - you know me well
Certainly you've got it right Would indeed be a cold day in hell
Ere I was sober on a Saturday night yeesh
A cold day indeed! This reminds me of Ogden Nash. I keep one of his poems in my pocket to use at parties and events to seem clever. Here it is: That's right, I said "booya" after an Ogden Nash poem. There is a first time for everything.
Boooya! There is something about a martini
Ere the dining and dancing begin
And to tell you the truth
It's not the vermouth
I think that perhaps it's the gin
Hey, at least you are a poet, I'm just some lyricist.
Yes she is. We have a pretty healthy appreciation for poetry around these parts. I have been fortunate to cultivate some nice friendships with the poets lil mentions in her response. I've actually been very fortunate to have been gifted some of humanodon's writings to use as lyrics. The most recent incarnation is here. -It's a collaborative music project on Hubski. More creatives are MOST WELCOME here. dabble away my friend!Are you a poet? :)